I’m not metal
I’m blood
I’m flesh
I’m real.
I’m not frozen.
I’m beating.
I’m alive.
I’m moving.
I don’t need to be winded,
I can start myself.
I can make myself rise,
I don’t need to be flipped on.
My mind is not made of gears.
My mind is made up of dreams,
My mind is made up of imagination.
My mind doesn’t clink,
It vrooms,
it soars,
it never stops.
And you can’t change that.
The title fits this so well. Cause it's like you are saying 'hey I have feelings too and you can't control me or tell me what to do'. :D (<- those are so weird... cause it's like the mouth is crooked)
ReplyDeleteThere aren't many words in each line, and I think it works very well with this poem. The part that stood out the most to me was "My mind doesn't clink it vrooms it soars it never stops." Words such as vrooms and clinks stood out and I could imagine it very well. I felt it connected to many different senses. Good job :)
ReplyDeleteI like how you went with a sort of theme here throughout the poem. What I'm getting out of it is basically you aren't a robot "I'm not metal.... I'm not frozen... I don't need to be winded.... My mind is not made of gears... My mind doesn't clink.." I really like that! It's awesome for a poem to have a theme that's through the whole thing and yours had one, at least I think so I'm not sure if it's what you were trying to achieve. Very nice! :)
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